Board Thread:OC Discussion/@comment-27265959-20151209192449

First review, So bear with me if its terrible

My commentary will be in bold.

1. Amayakasa Gaki

Name: Amayakasa Gaki ( Seems like an ok name.)

Age: 17 ( Ok. )

Appearance: Let's start with Amaya's hair. Amaya has long, dark pink, chain-like hair in two pigtails, similar to braids. Her eyes, slanted downwards, somewhat match her hair, but is in a lighter tone. She wears Uniform #4, and has a very large bust, even larger than Kokona or the teachers. (Seems......Hard to manage as a high-school student, hopefully she wont get a bad back.)  However, her large bust is only due to plastic surgery. (Makes Sense) Half of the students do not know this, so this can be used against her. She has fair skin and wears make-up, heart-shaped earrings, and pink high-heels rather than the school shoes (Not pictured). She wears red pantyhose. ( Seems good so far! )

Personality:  Amaya, although being very popular, is a bully. ( Stereotypical, but ok ) She's very rude most of the time and it's difficult to become her friend. She's very seductive, attractive, intiminating, and manipulative to both males and females ( In character so far ). Although rude and cruel, she has a high reputation among students because of her attractive nature. She has no mercy and does not care for other's feelings. ( If she does not care for other peoples feelings, then why would someone try to be her friend? )

However, this is simply on the exterior. ( FUN! )

On the interior, she is a broken girl with all her hopes completely shattered. (Oh. Ok. ) She only bullies others to make herself feel as if she was stronger. She got plastic surgery because of insecurity; she wanted people to like her more. She is very weak and helpless. However, nobody knows of this side of Amaya. ( K. )

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'''8.9/10. I cant really say anything bad about the oc besides the stereotypical populuar bully that is insecure so they bully others. and that breast thing due to it maybe causing bad back problems in the future due to them being so large in her youth. though these two things are most likely my personal peeves,  I still think this is a nice oc tho! its not a mary sue so thats good.'''

Next OC review will be below this one!

  