Thread:Porcy/@comment-34623708-20180712191159/@comment-26928286-20180713005132

Oki alright ^^ This might be short since I'm kinda tired, I'll review them together

Their portraits are cute and they have pretty good appearance descriptions, but one major thing I noticed is they have no personality nor backstory. Designs are fun but without a personality (not persona, I mean like actual personality) an OC is really just a portrait. A personality dictates their relationship with others, how they talk, literally everything they do. A persona is a good start since it shows how they react to murder, photographs, etc, but I have no idea who your characters really are. So, I would recommend writing a paragraph or two about it.

Alright now the smaller stuff! I noticed that Molly's reputation seems extremely high, and she is even called a goddess, plus she's the school council president. Megami shares all of these traits, but she was designed specifically to be perfect and difficult to defeat, basically the "Mary Sue" trope. I'm not saying Molly is like a Mary Sue, but i think you could tone her reputation and the goddess thing down a bit because the only other person like this is Megami. Another example: I have an OC, Asuka, who is a famous idol and she only has +80 reputation (still pretty high).

Ehh yea thats basically it, I like them a lot but every OC can improve :D