User blog comment:PISTACHIOLORD/Oc Reviews/@comment-27541663-20170624164640/@comment-28172979-20170627070953

Originality: 6/10

I feel like Cocoa is your average sweet and kind rival. Almost all sweet and kind rivals are almost the exact same as her in personality and acting wise.

Please put her through the Mary Sue test. I'm having a feeling that she is one. If you don't, I will.

Appearance: 5/10

Is it only me but are almost one fourth of the OCS in this have some kind of streak in their hair and brown or caramel colored hair? Real is also becoming a more and more reoccurring color as well? iwantedtosaysomethingaboutrouiaandcocoassimilaritesbutumnodramaplz

Personality: 5/10

As I said earlier, Cocoas personality is basically the regular sweet and happy rival. She's basically a somewhat different version of Amani. She's basically her godamn twin. Also the part where she's all tough and beats kids up or something like that. I don't feel like it fits her. It makes her feel sorta overpowered and like a Mary Sue in a way.

Backstory: 6/10

I have nothing wrong with it but....meh. I feel like you could start to pour more of what's left of your heart and soul into it. I like it and all, but I want it to be more detailed.

Page set up: 4/10

The page is too cluttered for your own good. Please make a separate page for her gallery and a separate page for her 100 questions. That's 99 questions to many for this page to handle.

Overall: 5/10