Thread:Porcy/@comment-30585047-20171024020227/@comment-26928286-20171024051434

Overall she's a pretty good OC but there's always room for improvement.

For one, I think 13 is a bit too young for her considering she's an OC for Yan Sim. I know it's a self-insert but perhaps you could age her up a bit, like to 15, 16, 17, or 18. Yandere Simulator is a game about murdering high school students in all sorts of ways, and although she's a middle-schooler, murdering a thirteen-year-old kid just seems messed up.

I noticed her persona is Social Evil. This basically means that if she witnesses a murder, she'll help raise the murderer's reputation. Aside from covering her face in an irritated way like an Evil NPC, it's never mentioned in her personality that she's evil in any way, so I recommend either adjusting her personality description or changing her Persona.