User blog comment:Cybrile/Yandere Sim OC Reviews/@comment-28172979-20170218143712/@comment-34588630-20170223021147

First off, I'm really sorry if this sounds rude but it would be a good idea to rewrite the personality and background information. It's got a few really distracting grammar mistakes

As for the personality itself, I think that Rouia knowing of everything Yandere-Chan's doing is pretty overpowered. Instead maybe she could be suspicious of Yandere-Chan and try to keep her sister away? Not really sure how to fix up that, but knowing 100% of her goals is too much. She would probably most likely tell a teacher that that's what she's doing and end up getting Yanchan expelled or smth. Plus with her being both a pervert and traitor, it's kinda conflicting imo, I'd say just stick to one or the other.

As for her background, I think it's pretty ok! Maybe you could change the brother dying from saving somebody to just dying in a fire which happened while the family was asleep. He didn't wake up in time to escape or for the firemen to come and ended up getting stuck or something?

A little bit of a side note with the names, I don't think that one of them havin a Japanese name would make sense at all. Sure he was born there but he has no Japanese blood in him, it just sticks out a little to me.

Other than that, she's good! Just I'd really recommend rewriting it.