Talk:Cocoa Sakuta/@comment-24651308-20170429024340

Firstly, the big floating image covers too much of the screen for me so I couldn't really read much, I had to enter edit mode to read things (I didn't edit anything don't worry), so I'd suggest removing that or making it much smaller.

Also, it'd look better if you put her personality section before her relationships. It's great you balanced out her positive traits (kind, smart etc) with some negative ones and even going into more detail with them! I also really really like that you put ways to eliminate her and her suitors since she is a rival. This page is greatly detailed, including how she'd act in game and everything, which makes the page long and slightly cluttered, but with some more organizing and perhaps rewriting a couple things the page could look nice. It's kinda strange her parents would give her an English name just because they were visiting the US... Maybe change that a bit?