Thread:Porcy/@comment-30775015-20160328021756/@comment-26928286-20160328025527

Well... uh... I wouldn't say they're Mary Sues. But... they honestly aren't very developed at all.

Akimi doesn't have the best design. Their hairstyle is okay, it's just the hair color. I'd stick to cyan or dark purple (the magenta color makes me cringe) and to change their eye color.

The thing that most disappointed me about Akimi was THEY DON'T HAVE A FREAKING PERSONALITY OR BACKSTORY. Akimi is not even a character. It's literally just a basic concept and a mediocre design.

Kyoko is much better, although still not what I'd classify as "good". The design is pleasing to the eye, although the bow colors look a little out of place. But the personality and backstory is almost nonexistent. Her personality consists of one bland, unoriginal sentence.

At least half of the OCs on this wiki are perverted. Try and at least throw in A BIT of diversity! At least Igor Luan isn't ENTIRELY perverted, and Sateriasis has a caring and kind side.

Also, uh, I'd like to comment that you shouldn't make Kyoko's boobs bigger than Kokona's. That's just wrong and it is borderline impossible for a high schooler to have boobs that big, even at age 18.

Overall, I am a bit disappointed by the quality of these OCs. I've seen worse, but really these aren't very great. They have little to no personality, their design is okay at best, and they lack originality. For Akimi, I suggest you just start over. Kyoko can be improved by adding more depth to her personality.

Also, please do not use the excuse of "they aren't finished". If you don't want to review them honestly in their best state, don't ask until they are finished.

Final score: 3/10